GRE Essay Topic 948 - Milk and dairy products are rich in vitamin D and calcium, substances essential for building and maintaining bones. Many people therefore believe that a diet rich in dairy products can help prevent osteoporosis, a disease in which the bones weaken significantly with age and that is linked to both environmental and genetic factors. But a long-term study of a large number of people has found that those who have consistently consumed dairy products throughout the years of the study have a higher rate of bone fractures than any other participants in the study. Since bone fractures are a symptom of osteoporosis, this study result shows that a diet rich in dairy products may actually increase, rather than decrease, the risk of osteoporosis. Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument.
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In this argument ,the arguer concludes that a diet rich in dairy products may increase,instead of decreasing the risk of osteoporosis,alluding that we should limit the consume of such products for health’s sake,To support this conclusion, the arguer cites the result of a study that those who have consisitantly consumed dairy products are more vulnerable than others to bone fracture,and fracture is a symptom of osteoporosis,hence more vulnerable to osteoporosis.It seems reasonable at first glance,a close examination with it ,however,will reveal several inherent flaws of it. In the first place ,the argument is based on a gratituous assumption that osteoporosis equals bone fracture,which is unwarrented.As we know ,there may be alternative reasons such as sports and traffic accidents that cause bone fracture.
Unless a convincing survey with the reasons of bone fractures of the individuals involved in the study is proposed that all fractures are caused by osteoporosis,the study will lend little support to the argument for its own representiveness is suspected.
In addition ,the arguer fails to take into account the age,hobby and other relevent background of the individuals who participated the study.It is not just diary products that matter.It’s possible ,even probably,that those who like mounting as well as diary products.It’s obvious that those climbers are more vulnerable to bone fracture,how can we owe the fracture to the diary products that he ate in the morning ?
Finally,the arguer ignores other factors such as genes,surroundings and habits that may have some bearings on osteoporosis,To trace the causes of osteoporosis to any single reason is to be miss the wood for the trees. To sum up, the argument is unconvincing due to several reasons state above .To Stength the argument,the arguer should estabish a causal relation beteween osteoporosis and bone fracture,to make the argument more cogent,the arguer should initiate a survey with those people to determine that if the diary products are the genuine reason for fracture.Unless the arguer do these ,the argument is not acceptable .
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