GRE Essay Topic 962 - The following appeared in a newspaper article published in the country of Corpora. "Twenty years ago, one half of all citizens in Corpora met the standards for adequate physical fitness as then defined by the national advisory board on physical fitness. Today, the board says that only one quarter of all citizens are adequately fit and suggests that spending too much time using computers may be the reason. But since overall fitness levels are highest in regions of Corpora where levels of computer ownership are also highest, it is clear that using computers has not made citizens less physically fit. Instead, as shown by this year's unusually low expenditures on fitness-related products and services, the recent decline in the economy is most likely the cause, and fitness levels will improve when the economy does. " Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument.
Author: Aishwarya Shankar | Date: May 9, 2017 | Score:4 | => 5 or 6 Essays, Click Here <=
The author has made a statement related to statistics in Corpora region that 20 years ago one half of the poulation was fit and now it has reduced to one quarter. Then he states the assumtion made by the board. He refutes with counter example that fitness levels were high where usage of computers were high.
He then goes on to making another assumtion of his own that decline in economy has lead to decline in fitness levels.
The very first sentence is background data to the statistics about today’s fitness levels and that it has reduced over the last twenty years. Assumption made by the board is that , this reduction in fitness levels is a cause of overusage of computers .There are two sides to this not neccessarily people who use computers saw a decline in their physical fitness , it might have been the others also . The board should have provided with some sort of evidences of survey conduceted on both the groups of people inorder to prevent the author refuting their claim.
Next the author refutes the above claim by stating that the corpora region was highest both in terms of computer usage and fitness levels .But he also fails to overlook this question : Are there people who belong to both the groups. It might also have benn infact this way , the population that attributed to high computer ownerships might have seen a increase in their physical fitness and few might have seen a depletion . There is no proper source of infromation . A survey yet again could have come in handy as an evidence that bolsters author’s refusal to acknoledge the board’s claim.
Finally a huge misconception of the author is that the unusually low expenditures on fitness related product and service , in a way seemed to be coherent with decline in economy and has caused the deline in physical fitness levels. The reason for low expenditure might also have been because people might have resorted to traditional practices for fitness like jogging, walking which does not require any severe expenditure. Also people who have already purchased a huge equipment like treadmill already once are less likely to buy it once again for the fact they own it already. Thus we see that the decline in economy did not cause the reduction in expenditure of fitness products, and it has indeed not lead to decline in fitness levels. Some other sort of exacting information may have come in handy to substantiate th author’s claim.
The author made few assumptions , weakely supported , and drew conclusions. The suggestions given above would bolster the assumtion and thereby strenghten even the conclusion.