GRE Essay Topic 953 - The following appeared in a memorandum from the president of Humana College. "Last year the number of students who enrolled in long-distance degree programs at OmniU niversity increased by 50%. During the same year, Omni showed a significant decrease from prior years in expenditures for dormitory and classroom space, most likely because instruction in the long-distance programs takes place via interactive video computer connections. In contrast, over the past three years, enrollment at Humana College has diminished and costs of maintaining buildings have risen. Thus, to increase enrollment and solve the problem of budget deficits at Humana College, we should initiate and actively promote long-distance degree programs like those at Omni. " Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument.
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The author concludes that there must be the effective development of long distance courses like those at Omni to cover up the expenditure of college cost. Stated in this way, the argument fails to mention the several key factors, on the basis of which it could be evaluated. To justify the argument, author reasons that cost for development has been rising since there is no enrollment. However, careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provides the little credible support for the author recommendation. Hence, the argument can be considered incomplete or unsubstantiated.
First of all, the author readily assumes that there is a reduction of expenditure but not mentions that how much amount is reduced, just saying 50 percent won’t give us exact data for finding expenditure.This is merely an assumption without much solid ground. For example, there might be a less student in previous years so that increase in 50% does not sound good. Hence, the argument would have been much more convincing if it explicitly stated the number of student in previous years.
The argument readily claims that enrollment has been diminished and expenses have been increasing. This again is a weak and unsupported assumption as it does not correlate with the author saying. If there is very less enrollment and going to be diminished then there is no need of making new dormitory and furniture. If the argument had provided evidence that there is not increment in expenses since there is no enrollment then it would have been a lot more convincing to the reader.
Finally, the author notes that there must be promotion and has to take initiative to have a high increment in enrollment. However, a careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provides little credible support for authors conclusion in several aspects, and raises several skeptical questions. If the author would have been emphasizing on particular tasks to promote and to do much more initiation then it would be better. Without convincing in which parts have to work hard, the reader is left with the impression that the claims made by the author are more of wishful thinking than substantive evidence.
In conclusion, the author’s argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it further, the author must provide more concrete evidence, perhaps by ways of healthy data. Finally, to better assess the argument, it would be necessary to know more information about increment of expenditures and different techniques and methods for high enrollment.