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Choice to improve the community

TOEFL Essay Topic 165 - You have decided to give several hours of your time each month to improve the community where you live. What is one thing you will do to improve your community? Why? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.

Author: crystal | Date: May 26, 2012 | Score:4 | => 5 or 6 Essays, Click Here <=

Choice to improve the community

I would like to help children in the community to do their school work several hours per week for free. Since the price of almost everything tends to grow higher and higher while the salary of the parents shrink down these years, I guess some parents in the community would have problem to pay for the tuition fee for their children’s education, not to say some cram school, which is impossible for them to afford. Those children, especially who have already fall behind the class, would be desperate on their study. That’s why someone have to step out and give them a hand.

I am only a normal girl, but I did pretty well on my school work when I was at those children age, so I guess I have some tips on study that might help them a lot. I’m not going to tell the what to answer, I would like to tell them HOW to learn, because that is the most important thing in one’s life. Remember the old proverb said: give a man fish, you feed him for a day; teach a man to fish, you feed him for a life time. And that is my goal, to inspire them on learning so, in some way, I can help them a life long.

If all the children in the community can learn well, and most importantly, know HOW to learn, than, no need to say, the community would become better. And children grow up under this kind of help would tend to pass on their knowledge and tips to the next generation. Wouldn’t that be great? I know this would be sort of hard since this is not the kind of thing that can be done by myself, that need the cooperation of people living here. But it is worth to try!




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